thinking of you
my breath of fresh air
every time i think of you
i forget to breathe
every time i think of you
i forget to breathe
* Haiku: A Japanese poem composed of three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables.
* for HaikuBones prompt: breath
8 comments:
Delightful twist and hint of irony in this otherwise romantic poem! Lovely!
I too like that twist!
cryptic messages
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I like the twist too--works perfectly.
I love the shift in the end!
good one!!
Nicely done!
Thankyou all.
Breath taking! Your poet was thinking very deep over a very much liked person to forget breathing!
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Did you ever stop breathing for no obvious reason? It's scary!
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